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My first internet story:Animal crossing:The story of TJ - 01-17-09

This is a mix from different AC games,stuff that people want to happrn,and fanriction.Please notice I might fix spelling errors in any part of this story any time,and wii probably do so.
As I look up, I saw the sky.It makes me think about whats ahead.What is my purpose?
Chapter 1:
The bus

As I got on to the bus, I never expected to see a frog at the wheel. It seemed like a dream.It ha talking animal's so how could it be real? Why not play along? Well let me tell you about me. I have blond hair, can get angry, and will fight for what I think is right.Then I took a seat on the bus.

"How you do there young feller’?”,the strange green turtle asked. He was wearing a blue hat and a uniform. So what are you doing on this here old bus? Visitin' your lass?

"I'm fine”, I say.

looking over me,and I jumped back as most would.

"I overheard your conversation”, the strange cat said,” I’m Rover."

"Uhm....okay..",I say.

"Where are you headed?”, Rover asked suspiciously with a questioning look in his eye.

"Well....I guess the nearest town.", I said sarcastically

“Ok that would be Ram Town!” Tell Tom Nook I said hi and you know me!”

As I got off my stop,everything started feeling more real.Was I really dreaming?

We arrived at a town.It was small looking."I guesse I should get off", I say.


"Wait?!"I don't have a map!"

As I saw the bus roaring away into the sunset.
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Chapter 2:Meeting other humans.

I thought to myself glumly that I never would get out, which is silly because of how little it was.
everyone has those moments though. I turned around, because I suddenly heard a noise. I saw somone.there were some humans! There were humans, just right in front of me!

So it isn't a dream?! I decided to walk toward them."Uh....hi? Do you know where I can buy a house?I need to buy one

You got any money?” A girl from one of the groups said.
I was about to talk and tell him what happened so far on my adventure, but then one of the girls explained what happend.Hi...I'm Nami [pronounced nam I by the way guys],she said.She had bluehair.It only had 1 curl but it matched well with her blue eyes.

One human From the group which was boy was called Jack, I knew because Nami told me.He was shy with blue hair and brown eyes.A weird combo.The other one was a girl that said," Hi,my name is Sally."

Sally had brown hair in one ponytail and brown eyes. They all stared at me” I’m TJ!",I say, figuring it's what they wanted to know.

Well I guess we should take you to Nook's,Nami said. She grabbed my hand and started to take me to Nook’s."Were are we going?", I said.

"We are going to find you a house,as she walked away from the other human's."You could telll they were wondering where in the world we were going.

She was pretty much running,wich is hard for me,for I am not,a strong runner.We approached what looked like a shop and went inside. It was very small and was brown with a sighn,"Nook's Cranny" at the top
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Chapter 3-Rip of Artist!

As we walked into the store,a strange racoon with a blue uniform tied behind all through his back.It was little,and only covered the front of him waist down to his knees."Hi", he said,"i'm Tom Nook!"I understand you are the newcomer TJ?"

"Yes,"Nami answered for me,"he is"

"hmm...do you need a house?",Tom said grinning.

"Yes,"I say nervously,,as I knew where this was going.

"Come with me!I have one currently left.",he said grinning.We arrived at a little house with a black roof.

"That look's small,I say dryly."

"You shouldn't be picky,"Tom Nook said."It's better than nothing."

"It's barely anything",TJ thought to himself as he went inside.It had a little boombox and a candle."Great," he said,"this will be easy."As I stepped outside I saw Nami and Tom Nook were waiting for me.

"Let's just get to the cost TJ"',he said."It will be 189,000 bells.",he said looking me in the eyes as if he suspected something.I totally forgot the money!Uh-Oh!

"uhm Mr. Nook...I didn't bring money but a 100 bells...",I say so quietly hardly anyone can hear.

"You WHAT?",Nami said worried.

"You WILL have to pay,"Nook said,"How about you come work with me to help pay of the cost and help you get used to things here?"

"No way!",I thought.But I had no money,so I decided to do it anyway.

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Chapter 4-Nook's talk about manner's

"Ok...",I say not to happily.

Nook only said a few quck words then dashed away.:

"Okay.Meet me at the shop again in about half a hour."

I started to run after him."Where are you going now!",Nami said as if she were annoyed.

"Wait Tom Nook!",I say.He looked back and stopped running as me and Nami started to catch up to him.

"What do you want TJ?,"Nook looked at him thoughtfully.

"May I have a....map?"As I said that,Tom Nook gave me "the look" like your parents do,which started to freak me out.

"What's with yougsters these day's?!They never take into the bueaty of the surroundings anymore,or even show respect for older folk and their manners."This suprised me,but to a bigger suprise,he reached out of the little blue clothes on him and pulled put a map.Nami had the same suprise I had,as her eyes were big.Mine probably were too."Again meet me in half an hour.
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Chapter 5-Nook's day-job
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Last edited by sonicguy11; 01-17-09 at 10:12 AM.. Reason: duh a story
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Re: My first internet story:Animal crossing:The story of TJ - 01-17-09

It seems good so far. Try not to repeat things like,
"I peered to my left. A strange cat was peering over me"
Another thing would be to have more description, and longer chapters in the future. I can tell that would be hard for this first chapter, so try doing that in the chapters after this =)
One last thing, don't rush things. There has to be something happening between,
"As that Rover pretty much shoved me off the bus and then he waved."
It can help with the flow of your writing, including more description etc. =)
Good luck with the fanfic, sonicguy =]



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Re: My first internet story:Animal crossing:The story of TJ - 01-19-09

I'll write more when I get a reply.Anyone??
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