[zpo25]

Im writing a more detailed story. Mario and Sonic died out. This is my story i started to make up when i was 4 and has contiuned in my head the past 7 years. (i think of more every night). Im adding 'lightingbolt the dog', my first ever fan-charater i am proud of. I SOOOOOO hope you enjoy.

The bombing wouldn't stop. Videoland was crumbling. The Creaters were winning. Peach Palace was being protected by Sunlight. It was all going horribly wrong. The pregnant, bright yellow, dog was using all her powers to protect the shelter, where all the Videolandians were hiding. The Creaters were like slave-masters of the 19th century. And the poor Videolandians were the slaves.
It was a BAD time to get into labour. Poor Sunlight. Fairytale's best superhero, had failed. She ran away. The queen was shouting out. Calling her. They needed her. The king was shouting the rule. The rule that would affect Sunlight and her newborn baby. 'You can your baby are banned from Fairytale, FORVER!' Sunlight ran into the forest. Crying. She gave birth to a sweet little girl. Sunlight ran off, leaving the new-born behind.

'LightingBolt? LightingBolt? Breakfast is ready!' Mario knocked on LightingBolt's door. LightingBolt heaved herself out of bed. She was excited. It was Ruby's birthday today. She couldn't wait. Mario had kindly let them use the race-track. LightingBolt threw her black-body suit on and ran out of the door. 'Oops, I forgot something!' She turned around and grabbed a necklace with a icon, that looked like a yellow dog head. She ran down the staris fast, 'as fast as lighting' she thought. As she sat ready to eat, Peach was complaining. 'LightingBolt The Dog, that suit is way too revealing. You need a dress. Not like that hedgehog's one. A proper dress, like mine.' LightingBolt sighed. 'Peach, this suit is the only one that can withstand my super-speed! Ruby is not just a hedgehog, shes my best friend.' After gobbling down a huge breakfast, LightingBolt ran to Videoland. Everybody glared at her. She hated her family's past life. She ran past Peach Palace. 'Why is it called Peach Palace when Peach lives in a house on the edge of the Videoland border?' LightingBolt always thought. Finally she got to Ruby's small house.


Please note I need more charaters, so you may request. U ARE BEING WARNED: U could be the charater other's love.

[sushi4life]

creative at best ^^

[zpo25]

Thank u. I'll make more when this darn head-ache clears up.

[Shivam]

Its good, try to add some description to it to make more interesting. Other than that its quite good. Research some good words and it'll turn out awesomely. Look at my old dead story you may get some words from it. And in case its not supposed to be spelt like that, its Creators, not Creaters. =). Keep working at it and you'll become a great writer =)..

[zpo25]

thats how its spelt in da story!

[Shivam]

Originally Posted by zpo25

thats how its spelt in da story!

Ok =).

[zpo25]

MORE!!!!!!

LightingBolt skidded to a stop in front of Ruby's house. There was Ruby, sweeping the front yard. LightingBolt walked up to the gate and Ruby looked up. 'Happy Birthday Best Buddy!' Ruby blushed. 'Aw, thanks! Look, Master is being really kind today. He removed my neck-chain' 'Why couldn't he set you free? THAT'S a good birthday present!' LightingBolt sneered. 'Might've been! Replied Ruby, Now lets get some grub' Ruby jumped on to LightingBolt when a grey hedgehog walked up to them. 'Ha! Hello Slave-girl and Miss My-Mum-Dumps-Me-And-Runs-Away!' 'Not now, Weiss.' Ruby sighed. 'I heard it was your birthday, Ruby!' growled Weiss. 'And i herd you liek mudkipz!' blurtted out LightingBolt, the remark making Ruby laugh. 'That's it! I challenge you to a pokemon battle! Loomer, get over here!' A 15-year-old boy wearing a 'tough' suit walked over to them. 'Wassup, Weiss?' 'The Orphan Sisters want to battle us.' It was true. Both Ruby and LightingBolt were orphans. They met at the orphanage when they were only 3, then Ruby got adopted and sold as a slave, while LightingBolt was adpoted by Mario.

After totally trashing Loomer and Weiss, LightingBolt and Ruby sped off to Mario's Circuit. 'So, what do you think about the royal family happenings so far, Rubes?' 'Prince Nayik The Hedgefox married Alex The Echidna. Alex's dress was supposed to be the most expensive, yet beautiful, yet! Prince SilverTails is looking for a wife now. *sigh* I'd love to be that lucky girl...' Ruby replied. 'Woah, Rubes are you okay? Royality would NEVER marry a slave-girl. No offesense.' 'None taken. But we are both 11. We are expected to get married now. I wonder who I'll end up with. Look, there's Mario waving! We are here!' Ruby and LightingBolt skidded to a stop. Ruby jumped off LightingBolt's back. 'You're here ladies! Ruby, this is for you!' Mario held a present out for Ruby. She took it. 'Aw, you didn't have to do that. Thank you!' 'Don't mention it. You aren't going to do what you wanted to do. Peach will kill me for this. But this is what you MUST do if you want to see your mum again...'

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'They are being kept in the Triangle.' The girls gasped. 'Not the Triangle?!?!??!?!' Ruby asked. 'Sadly, that is so.' Mario replied. 'They will never survive.... they are most likely dead!' said a tearful hedgehog. LightingBolt patted Ruby on the back 'There, there, Rubes. They are our mums! I don't know about yours, but mine was the best superhero of all time!' 'SO? Just because your mum is the 'best superhero of all time' doesn't mean she lived. Anyway, how would that affect my mum?!??!?' snapped Ruby. 'Calm down Rubes, we must find them.' LightingBolt softly replied. 'LightingBolt is right. Dead or alive, you must venture and find them. Go tomorrow girls. We will pack tonight.' Mario said. 'Wait! I'm a slave. If I run-away from Master, I will be exacuted for treason!' cried Ruby. 'Whatever shall we do?' 'Tell your Master, thats what!' Mario said. 'Come on girls, in Videoland!' Mario marched off and a tearful Ruby walked behind him. Ruby set off a few minutes after the red trio, thinking. 'Mum. She left me. Adboned me. Did she want me? Does she love me? Is Mum alive? Ugh, I hope those questions will be answered soon.'

LightingBolt trudged into Videoland. She looked around. People were still glaring at her. 'Make them stop.' she thought. 'Make them stop!' Stuff had changed from when her mother lived in Videoland. Peach Palace had the logo of Fairytale on the castle. The red, hedgehog face with 2 bright tails. The rule the king shouted to her mum long ago had changed. LightingBolt was allowed in Videoland, but one back-sass to anyone could mean exacution! 'Ugh. Dumb rule.' LightingBolt walked into town and was surpised that Ruby was chatting to Prince Silvertails! LightingBolt ran up and said a 'hello' with a bow. 'Sir' she added quickly. 'Hello LightingBolt! I was just talking to your cute friend here!' 'More like flirting with her!' LightingBolt thought. 'Your going to find your mums, am I correct?' the prince asked. The girls nodded they're heads. Then a ear-shattering scream could be heard. 'ALEX!!!!!!!!!!!!' 'Princess Alex must be in trouble. I'll go find my Dad!' Silvertails sped off. 'Bolty, lets find out whats up!' Ruby said. 'Okay! Rubes.' The girls sped to find Nayik. 'LightingBolt The Dog! I hope you have the same powers as your mum! Alex has gone missing!'

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Ruby and LightingBolt bowed. 'Your Majesty, what his wrong, sir?' Ruby questioned. Nayik laughed. 'Oh, don't talk that rubbish! Act like im your best friend!' 'Uh, okay, Bolty! Whoops!' Ruby blushed. Nayik and LightingBolt laughed. Nayik cleared his throat. 'We have to find Alex. I want you 2 to go to the Triangle. GO!!!!!! I WANT TO FIND MY WIFE!' Ruby and LightingBolt sped off. 'Looks like the start of our adventures' LightingBolt chuckled

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LighingBolt ran at the speed of lighting to the Triangle. Ruby was on her Arcanine, who was just behind LightingBolt. 'Talking about relationships, how did you and Jamie break up?' LighingBolt asked. Jamie was a bright, blue monkey who loved Ruby. Ruby and Jamie used to go out, but when Ruby asked Jamie questions, Jamie used to yell and shout. They broke up, and rumour as it Jamie turned evil. 'You know how, so don't ask. Oh, look, *ulp* its the Triangle!' Arcanine and LighingBolt skidded to a halt. Ruby held up a poke-ball. 'Arcanine, return' Ruby said. 'Now what? The Triangle's security is WAY too high for us to break in.' The Triangle was the Creaters' only prison in Fairytale. The Royal Family kept it there, because they knew there would be a massive war if they laid hands on it. 'The Triangle, you ladies trying to break in?' a voice came. 'Who's there?' questioned LightingBolt. A pink, 2-tailed fox walked up to them. 'I am Professor Daniel. You can call me Dan.' he winked. Ruby blushed and LightingBolt rolled her eyes. 'Look, we need to rescue our Mums.' LightingBolt said. 'If they are in there.' she quickly added. Dan held up a thing that looked like a pink Poke-dex. 'This, can track anyone, or they're relvatives, I'll need a spine of you, red hedgehog, or a hair of you, yellow dog.' Dan explained. 'Oh, Im so sorry. Im Ruby The Hedgehog, and my friend here is LightingBolt the Dog. Her mum is Sunlight the Dog. I don't know the name of mine.' Ruby said. 'Rosa.' 'Pardon?' asked Ruby. 'Rosa. That's your mum's name. She's famous ya know!' Dan replied. 'Since you don't know your own Mum, , I better tell you how you got your Aura powers.' Dan started to tell the girls the story. 'You were a little baby, Ruby. One day, in the Kanto region i think it is, the tree of forgiveness started crumble. Ash and his friends, along with the pokemon Lucario, went to the tree to find Ash's first pokemon, Pikachu. Ash didn't want to talk, but we got out of him that Lucario sacfircied his life to save Mew, the ledgendary that lived there, Ash and his friends. When the tree started to crumble, Rosa and Sunlight ran to the tree. Lucario was dead by then, and Ash had left. Rosa, Ruby and SunLight ran to the tree. Rosa, for some reason, wanted to give Ruby aura powers. Rosa took of her necklace and placed it on Mew, who gave some of it's powers to the necklace, and then was caught by Rosa. Rosa put the necklace on you, Ruby, then gave Mew's master ball to you.' 'Hey, I'm wearing that necklace right now, and I still have Mew!' shouted out Ruby. 'yes, now give me a spine/hair, both of you, so I can fid your Mums!' said Dan. Both the girls plucked a spine/hair out, and gave it to Dan. 'Thank you. Now, lets see, oh.' Dan's voice had a tone of disappointment in it. 'Sorry, Ruby, Rosa is dead. SunLight is in the Triangle.' Tears came to Ruby's eyes, but she shaked them away. 'Thank you Dan.' she turned to LightingBolt. 'Come on Bolty, we got a superhero to save!' Then the theme tune to 'Kirby: Right Back At 'Cha' started to play. LightingBolt rumaged thorough her pockets.