The story i'm writing ^~^.

[Happysawks]

Originally Posted by lolwut

Jedi should've changed name to iEvange, then you'd sound French :3 (i-eev-anje)

akaku akaku akaku~

lolz....? xP

[Hairhead]

yes it was very deep and from the heart, you have a very creative mind. It is clear you have put a lot of thought in to this piece of writing. KARMA

[Happysawks]

Originally Posted by Hairhead

yes it was very deep and from the heart, you have a very creative mind. It is clear you have put a lot of thought in to this piece of writing. KARMA

thank u! =P xD yepp..

[InJoyAndSorrow]

That was really beautiful in an emo way (//_-)

JK, beautiful in a beautiful way :)

[flygirl]

It's good, but long, my eyes are about to explode

[ALESANA]

Originally Posted by iEvangel

I started writing a story >.< and i just want to know wat people think x]
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The rain continued bucketing down as I sobbed gently against Oliver’s chest, “Why me?”
The clouds started parting, revealing the usual light blue sky. The sun was still hidden behind the clouds, and the rain continued too fall. I felt Oliver’s grieving stare on my eyes, and I regretted looking up. The sun started to shine, and I felt the ultra-violet rays against my body. The sun was now shining all around Oliver and I, exactly like a spotlight on a stage. Everywhere else around us was still cloudy, dull and still raining.
“Emily?” Oliver asked gently, “What… what if it wasn’t her?”
“Impossible!” I laughed nervously, “What are you saying?”
The sun was covered by the clouds again, and the rain started to bucket down even harder then before.
“What… what if I was jealous of your boy friend and…” He didn’t say anymore. I didn’t want him to say anymore. It hurt me to much inside to hear it. I felt tears fall gently and slowly onto my head, Oliver was crying. His gaze drifted away from mine as he cried quietly, loosening his grip on me. I lifted my left hand up and stroked both his cheeks, wiping away his tears, “Olly. I love you too, but… please tell me you didn’t…” I didn’t dare to finish my sentence either. I felt Oliver start to shiver under my grip, and I pulled him closer towards me. I kept my eyes locked onto his gaze that drifted everywhere, besides me and my tear stained gaze. Negative thoughts buzzed through my throbbing head. Was Oliver hurting as much as me? Is he only hurting because I am? Could… Could this all be his fault? The rain suddenly stopped, and the clouds all parted, as if the sun was pushing them away. I glared up at the sky, as the weather continued to change from rainy, to sunny. I concentrated on the clear sky, and the clouds that drifted further and further away from the sun, trying to keep my mind off the pain, the grieving pain of losing a loved one.
“Then I’d be lying…” Oliver pushed me gently away, “I can’t stand to see you so hurt because of me, Please, Forget me.” He kissed me on the forehead and ran off, leaving me there in the middle of the street. It took awhile for the pain to kick in, and when it did, I was ready for it. I fell onto the ground and buried my crying face in my knees. My head was empty, all my thoughts evaporated as all I could concentrate on now was the pain of losing the two guys I loved, and not just two guys I loved, but my best friends. The clouds came back, covering the sun as quick as they could, and the rain fell heavily on me. The two people I lived for were gone, what else was there really to live for?

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Running away from the pain.


The clouds remained in their usual spots in the sky, always in front of the sun, making sure no sunlight would shine through onto my empty town. The streets were empty and most people had gone away for the summer. I examined my reflection looking back at me through the mirror. My long hair hung back messily in a loose pony-tail. My eyes were still red from crying, and the bags under my eyes got bigger and bigger each sleepless night. I didn’t know who the person in the mirror was anymore. I was ugly, and my skin was so pale due to the lack of sunlight.
“Emily?” The light from the other rooms brought pain to my eyes, and I shielded them from the light.
“What do you want?” I groaned giving up shielding the light, and just shut my eyes.
“I’m taking you out. Do you even know who I am?”
“Um, aren’t you that Wally kid from across the street?” I sighed. I knew who he was, very well. Wally had been my best friend when I first moved to Brisbane. But then when I met Oliver and Rob, Wally and I slipped apart. Since I lost Oliver and Rob, he talks to me more. I hate it.
“Bingo, kid.” He laughed quietly, “Now, get out of those… clothes.” It’s amazing how he can easily talk to me without getting scared that I’ll break down in front of him, or throw a shoe at him. It’s happened before. When Wally had found me on the street in the rain about a year ago from today, I had easily just let him carry me home, but now I’d rather he got out of my life. Why must there always be someone who needs to help me? I’m an independent female I can look after myself… Wally had to clear his throat to catch my attention, “C’mon. Are you coming or not?”
“Not.” I remained in my stone formation on the ground while Wally stared at me accusingly. I didn’t want to go out with him for a walk. So what? If it’s that bad of a crime, he might as well arrest me. Now that you mention it, he would get a laugh out of arresting me.
“Its compulsory darl,” He stated as he moved closer to me and picked me up from under my shoulders. You’d think he has no respect for girls, “I’ll drag you by a leash if I have too.” Unfortunately, I knew he wasn’t lying. He would seriously get out a leash and drag me across on the beach without my consent. His triumphant gaze locked onto my zombie, expressionless gaze. For a few seconds we stared into each others eyes, trying to work out what we were thinking. But we both failed and sighed effortlessly.
“Why, are you trying so hard Wally?” I asked when I couldn’t discover my answers from his eyes, “I mean, we aren’t even that much of friends anymore…”
“Uh, because your mum told me to.” He winked at me and pulled me off the ground onto his shoulders. I wrapped my arms around his neck, about ready to choke him to death… but what good would that do? I kept my balance by holding gently around his neck. I undid my loose pony-tail and tried to re-do it up a little bit tighter.
“Ugh.” I groaned. My hair worse then before, “Have I told you how much I hate you, and my hair?”
Wally chuckled but didn’t answer, he continued to walk forward and take me out of the house. It surprised me how relaxed he just walked out onto the street with a 12 year-old girl on his shoulders. I started feeling multiple droplets of water falling from the sky onto me. It was raining once again. Just as I had expected, the first time back outside and it’d be pouring rain. The clouds were a dark grey colour and I sensed thunder coming on.
“Beautiful weather isn’t it?” Wally said nodding. I couldn’t sense any sarcasm in his voice.
“I guess so.” I lied. I wasn’t in the mood or emotional state to argue with him. He smiled encouragingly as if he was trying to lift my sad mood. It didn’t work.
“So,” Wally sighed trying to start a conversation, “What a great time to tell your story of your depression.”

Its pretty damn good eves well done. Quite sad actually 2 I didn't cry or anything but pretty moving. What makes it even better is my name is in it like 20 times haha just playing.

[Sukiyah]

Shouldn't this go in the Creative writing place? x3

Anyways~
I think it was really good! ^0^
You used lots of adjectives and describing words so that I can visualize what I was reading in my mind :]
Hope you write more so I can read why her buddies left D=

[POOPII~KII]

Awwww~ T xT
-sob sob sob-
That was uber good =)
I wish I could write like that Xb
Keep it going~!! <3 : D

[Happysawks]

Originally Posted by the used

That was really beautiful in an emo way (//_-)

JK, beautiful in a beautiful way :)

lol xD
thankzzz! <3

Originally Posted by IRIS

Its pretty damn good eves well done. Quite sad actually 2 I didn't cry or anything but pretty moving. What makes it even better is my name is in it like 20 times haha just playing.

xD ur righttt!! took me a lil 2 get wot u meant =P

Originally Posted by Sukiyah

Shouldn't this go in the Creative writing place? x3

Anyways~
I think it was really good! ^0^
You used lots of adjectives and describing words so that I can visualize what I was reading in my mind :]
Hope you write more so I can read why her buddies left D=

lolzz mayb it shud xDDDDD!! lol.. did u? xD i have my own vision of it x] it is most likelii DIFFERENT ;]
LOL ok.

Originally Posted by POOPII~KII

Awwww~ T xT
-sob sob sob-
That was uber good =)
I wish I could write like that Xb
Keep it going~!! <3 : D

Dx ik ik i started it sad Dx hahaha.. lol do u? xDD.